First time writing a 'fic, please go easy on me.

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Made some shitty fanfiction today cause I was bored o algo Phillips 04/26/26 (Sun) 15:40:37 No.130939

First time writing a 'fic, please go easy on me.

Zaryan 04/27/26 (Mon) 11:03:08 No.130947

Bumo because the site ACKed yesterday

Zaryan 04/27/26 (Mon) 11:26:38 No.130953

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I love that you wrote this Zaryan and please never stop writing if you enjoy it but this is straight ass
I recommend writing stuff in your native language next time and translating that into english, with a view to avoid repetition. There's also no need to write down everything: we (specifically on the zarty) know about who these characters are, how they behave and what their thought process is.

Zaryan 04/27/26 (Mon) 11:32:05 No.130957

>but this is straight ass
read it with a straight face at first until this part

Zaryan 04/27/26 (Mon) 12:15:58 No.130972

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The fact that it's formatted like one of my uni papers alongside the fact that the prose also reads like a fucking report does not help reinforce that it's a fiktie