No.110205
Ok Zaryans, I've read a decent amount of fanfics since I joined this GEMMY SPACE and I've decided to rank them all (the ones I felt like)
1. Reunion. 5/10: It's ok, the pacing is kinda quick for what it's trying to do, and it feels the needs to explain everything instead of letting the reader interpret it.
2. Death and Reborn, 7/10: I would've given this a 9, but I re-read it and realized it wasn't as good as I remembered. I do like the concept, but it also suffers from bad initial pacing and overexplaining. Also it was assisted with AI and it kinda shows in some parts, but it didn't hinder how I felt about it. Pretty decent, but it could be better
10 Dutch Days, 2/10: Really annoying dialogue. They won't shut up about the stupid game Maya played, and mentioning important things which are never brought up again. Everything feels forced, and I just don't care about any of the characters. It's a decent concept, having the personalities of Coco and Maya somewhat swapped (doe Maya still kinda has anxiety), but it's so poorly executed I can't give it any higher than a 2/10
When Days Get Brighter in Amsterdam, 4/10: Could've been decent were it not
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the fanfiction. It's also written like its a screenplay and NOT a book, so that's weird. There's also a side story that I just don't care about, and the nigger who uploaded it to AO3 is a retard and its impossible to read so you have to go on PLEBBIT if you wanna actually read it.
Kinda cool concept, but once again, things feel pretty forced
Total Opposites, 0/10: Abysmal Yurifag dogshit. Cleo likes Coco and goes about getting with her in the stupidest ways possible. Everybody acts out of character and nothing makes sense. SNCA the fanfiction.
One More Shot, 7/10: Maya becomes and alcoholic.
Creator deleted it because they're a selfish little fuck or whatever. The first few chapters really fucking suck doe
Tipping Point, 6/10: Coco hits Maya cause she got mad over an insult. The family kinda collapses from there. It's not finished yet so idk how it's gonna end. Decent storytelling though it's not very descriptive, and has pretty akward dialogue at times. Also Coco acts really out of character in this, and the Eiko plotline is shoved in which completely derails the entire thing.
Project Ongezoid, -3 Thrembillion/10: One of the only Zellig Fanfics on Watpad. I would've given it a 9/10, but for SOME REASON, THE CREATOR MADE AN AMAZING AND kinda EMOTIONAL STORY, AND DECIDED TO MAKE THE ENDING "IT WAS ALL A DREAM!!" WHY??? IT WAS SO FUCKING GOOD AND YOU RUINED IT YOU SELFISH NIGGER
that's all from me, im writing my own fanfiction right now about Coco beating up Maya's shitskin bully (which might lead into an overarching story from there) but ive been kinda depressed (Maya reference GEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEG) so it might take a while
No.110213
>>110205I liked Reunion. I think college grad age like 22-23 might’ve worked better than 26 for some plot points and there is a bit too much of Mymy’s oc sailor friends. But I liked how Maya’s anxiety was characterized by negative intrusive thoughts, that was authentic to me. I thought the motivations and reactions were mostly in character, and the writing was relatively good. I agree the pacing is a little quick but I think it kinda makes sense that Coco and Mymy would push because they only have a few weeks. Personally I would give it 8/10 compared to other lig fics I’ve read, and a 7 if the next chapter puts Maya into a relationship with that sailor. I’m just a sucker for wholesome adopted sibling love and bonding.
No.110214
>>110213i didnt find the positive thoughts to be that realistic. in my experience, the thoughts arent instantly replaced by positive ones, its just the negative ones are pushed to the back of your head, and over time are replaced by more positive ones as you get better
No.110216
>>110205I haven't read any of the Ongezellig Fanfics yet. I think, I should, I wanna see how bad '10 Dutch days' actually is (because it sounds pretty horrible, and probably is) but I'll have to read them to find out.
No.110219
>>110214I didn’t say the positive thoughts were realistic but the negative thoughts didn’t get completely replaced by positive thoughts, she just became able to push the negative ones down and let positive thoughts have room. In my experience positive thoughts don’t really intrude and the only “encouraging” voice is your own, and trying to remember to be rational and prioritize listening to it over the anxiety can be hard.
No.110221
>>110219I guess that’s true
No.110362
>>110205CONTRAVERSIALComfortably Uncomfortable, 7/10: The Title sums up how I felt while reading it. This is the length of an average novel
GEG. Maya and Coco essentially fall in love (in a natural way) but because they're sisters, it just feels weird. I know they're not blood related but it's still a bit weird. ALTHOUGH, it never made me that uncomfortable throughout, though it did get close at times.
There's no incest (cause incest needs 1. the people to be blood related and 2. actual sex, which is not present in the thing)
Overall, it was a decent read, but it really should've been between Maya and Someone Else, or just have Maya and Coco getting closer instead of falling in love.
>ESL FNF PEDO ESL FNF PEDO ESL FNF PEDO ESL FNF PEDO YOU CANNOT LIKE ANY OF THIS BECAUSE IT IS YURIFAG SLOP YOU FA-AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACK! No.110372
>>110362>This is the length of an average novel>Maya and Coco essentially fall in love (in a natural way)we OVERLY good on that folk😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂