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>>34047
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<hundreds of episodes
Personally I find this to be too many, I think the actual story of Ongezellig could be told well in about 30 episodes over 2 seasons. I think you should figure out the arcs you actually want to tell and see how much that actually takes. Going too far over this will inevitably dilute the story moments and create convoluted ways to keep the sisters from developing emotionally. Already here we have Maya actually having this rare cathartic moment and immediately undoing it. This can work, but not indefinitely and weakens it when it does happen. Maya would be avoiding this kind of emotional outburst whenever she can, but when it happens it would have an effect on her. She should be getting worse quietly, she is avoidant and insecure which makes her depressed which makes her avoidant and insecure.
It’s got potential but you need to figure out where this is actually going and rewrite in a format that actually tells a story. I don’t know if you plan on actually making this into an animatie or novel or just teleplays, but it would be good to read or see in a format telling me a story instead of telling me about a story. Keep it up.